Story: Animals All Aboard
Animals All Aboard Source: Cobble Hill |
Bibliography: Genesis CH. 5-11, Kings James bible
Author's Note: I took the biblical story of Noah's Ark and wrote it from the animal's point of view. In the original story, God is unhappy with humanity and comes to Noah who is favorable. God gives Noah detailed instructions on how to build an Ark and He makes a covenant with Noah. Noah obeys God, and himself, his wife, the rest of his family board the ark, and a male and female of every pure creature on early board the ark. It rains for 40 days and 40 nights, and every living creature on early who isn't on the boat perishes. The flood last 150 days, then the ark is docked until the Lord summons them all off the ark. God then promises never to destroy the earth again. He reminds Noah of his domain over the animals, and instructs all living creatures to be fruitful and multiply. I decided to write this story from the animal's point of view.
Animals All Aboard
One morning as I was flying around looking for my breakfast, I overheard the most frightening news. A man named God was talking to a very only man names Noah. God said that this so called earth was evil and should be destroyed. I could tell God was a very powerful creature, and that he meant what He said. I soon ran into my friend, the Raven, who also heard the frightful news. We rested on a tree branch to ease-drop on the rest of the conversation.
"Make an ark out of gopher wood and create many rooms in it" God said to Noah. "I will bring a flood on the earth, but you and your family will be safe if you complete my covenant. To do this you must collect seven of every pure creature and two of every beast, a male and female, and keep them all alive."
After hearing this news, the Raven and I looked at each other. "Dove, we must spread the news and make sure we are the two of our kind to survive the disaster that is soon to come!" the Raven said to me. God had also told Noah that he must collect many birds in order to keep seeds upon the earth.
"We must have people of our kind eat a variety of seeds!" I said to the Raven, and then we were off to spread the message.
Soon, hundreds of animals, beast and creatures of purity, were headed towards Noah's ship grounds. Once the ark was finished, thousands of animals had migrated to where he lived. Two by two creatures entered the ark. The ship became very crowded, and I was fortunate to have the ability to sit above most animals. The elephants were not satisfied by this temporary arrangement.
"Why is everyone looking at me like I am taking up all their space? It is not my fault that all theses rooms are small and there is an elephant in the room!"
"I feel your pain," said Mr. giraffe. "My neck is aching, I can not possibly stay in this confinement!"
For a hundred and fifty days the waves crashed against the ark, and the animals bickered. During this chaos, food became scarce, and temperaments raised. The lions, tigers, and bears were temped to feast on all the indefensible prey located at their fingertips - OH MY! When things became heated, the orangutan would advice the animals to pray to God, and he always delivered.
At the end of the tenth month, the waters began to recede and mountain tops became visible. Noah opened a window and instructed the Raven to go survey the land and report back to him. There was no place for the Raven to rest his feet, for the earth was still flooded. One day, Noah instructed me, the Dove, to go and see if the water had abated the land. I flew and flew with no land in sight. When I returned Noah stuck out his arm for me to come to him. Noah and I had become very close. I enjoyed this man. His faith was strong and unshaken, which brought me comfort.
A week later, as I was sent to survey the and, I found an olive tree. I took one of the leaves of with my beak, and clenched it for dear life as I hurried back to the ark. Noah wanted to stay one more week upon the ark to be sure the waters had cleared the earth. I week later he sent me again, this time he instructed me not to return if it was clear our time of recreation had come. As I flew above the dried earth, I knew that soon all of the creatures of the ark would soon join me upon the earth.
As I began to making my new home in that olive tree, I heard God say, "Go forth of the ark, take your wife and your family. Lead all the living creating with you and settle the earth. Breed abundantly and be fruitful and multiply upon the earth." And so Noah lead everyone off the ark, created an alter, and encouraged every living thing to thank God for their deliverance. I prayed from my olive tree. I heard birds calling out, wolves howling, and beasts growling with praise. God said he would never curse the ground again, and we all believed His word was true.
Wow Elizabeth, this is a great twist on a familiar biblical story. Having the story come from the animals’ point of view is a really creative idea! I really liked how you developed the dove's personality throughout the short story. It was great that he was able to feel a connection to Noah because God chose him as the one to survive and recreate humanity. The dove is symbolic from that story and you managed to portray that theme through your story. I wonder what would have happened in your story if the animals that had overheard the conversation were unable to get on the boat. Or if they had told other animals about what they had heard, and the animals were able to prepare for it and somehow survive the flood. Obviously, this would be a totally different story and meaning to the story you told, but it could be interesting to see that take on the story. Thanks for sharing!
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ReplyDeleteWhat a wonderful story! I think you have done a wonderful, creative job with this retelling. I'd like to mention a couple of things that stood out to me about this story.
First, your opening picture captured my attention! It provides a fantastic opening image with bright colors and an animated setting. Stylistically, this improves the readability of your story. Another layout characteristic that stood out to me was the font that you have chosen. I can't decide if it is much different to read than other blogs that I've read so far, but it is different, and I like that!
I love how you begin the narrative without describing your character. Though we pick up hints that you are a bird, we don't discover that you are the Dove (a huge character in this story) until the third paragraph. This is very Hemingway-esque, to assume that your audience will pick up hints based off of your descriptions. Brilliant.)
Another feature that I enjoyed about your writing was how you incorporated the animals with humor and creativity, such as using the phrase "elephant in the room" to refer to a literal elephant in the room. I thought this was not only funny but very creative.
Perhaps it was because I misread the font, but I saw a couple things in the first paragraph that you might consider changing to add some clarity. There is a part where you say "a very only man names Noah," and I think you may have meant "a very lonely man named Noah." Just a thought! Great job, keep it up.
Hi Elizabeth, I am really glad that you decided to put the author’s note at the beginning instead of the end like everyone else did because I would have been really confused going into the story and wondering why the main character was flying. I really like that the story is from the animals’ perspectives because it gives you two sides of the story. Your vocabulary is wonderful and your descriptions were perfect! It made it really interesting to read!
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